Essay+on+the+river



Grade earned is 83.

To raise the grade, do the following by Wednesday night, November 17, and please e-mail me when you are done:


 * Biggest difficulty: Your explanation of the Conflict is erroneous, I believe, because you mistakenly talk about the conflict in __Hatchet__, at first, and not the beginning conflict in __The River__.
 * Provide more, and more precise, examples of t-p in chapters 17, 19-24.
 * Revise and strengthen your traits paragraph!! More elaboration of examples/specifics is needed.
 * More substantial support from the text is needed for your summaries of 17, 19-24. Where are the quotes I asked for??

Your intro. and conclusion are strong. Good job.

You need to critically review your writing and the thoughs/content in your writing two or three or four times before you say it is complete.

Thank you.

Yours,

Mr. Baskin